BMW poem
Tuesday September 18th 2007, 8:42 am
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Its a powerful fast blue car,

A shiny sports car.

A metallic, silvery, blue car.

The rich rubber cruises along the road.

The eye sparkle in the night like stars.

By Ben





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5 Comments so far

* your poem was very good

* you described the car very well

wish: It could be a bit longer

Comment by    ben and andrew 11.14.07 @ 7:57 am

*- We think you used alot of good adjectives.

*- We like your idea of BMW.

:( – We think your work could be longer.

Signed Caitlin and Rachael

Comment by    Rachael & Caitlin 11.14.07 @ 8:05 am

*-You have very good adjectives.
*-you have described the bmw very very well.
WiSh-your poem is a bit short more lines would be better.

Comment by    Hannah and Jennifer 11.14.07 @ 8:08 am

*star* amazing adjectives
*star* good spelling
?wish? no wish

Comment by    Emma & lewis 11.14.07 @ 8:12 am

*- you used great adjectives
*- you must have thought hard on this
? no wish

Comment by    laura & kieran 11.28.07 @ 8:10 am



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