Comments for Hillhead Primary School

Comment on James and the Giant peach by melissa and lewis

melissa and lewis — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:14:27 +0000

*I think it was very good.

*Good adjectives.

(wish)I think you could find more intresting openers.

Comment on SHOULD CHILDREN WEAR SCHOOL UNIFORM? by Maliha and Ross

Maliha and Ross — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:12:59 +0000

*star* -You have made your peice of writing interesting.
*star* -This is a very good bit of vocabulary.
?wish? -You writing could be made better by putting capitals at the start of your sentences and by improving your punctuation.

Comment on Should children wear school uniform? by lyndsay. by becky and andrew

becky and andrew — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:11:57 +0000

I think that you are half right because you could get lost on a school trip but you uniform is so uncomfortable!

Comment on Winter Poem by Hannah

Hannah — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:10:50 +0000

* I like your poem because your explaining the positive things about winter and how exiting it is.
* Your sentences are a good lenth.

wish:Try and have more exiting adjectives.

Comment on BMW poem by laura & kieran

laura & kieran — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:10:26 +0000

*- you used great adjectives
*- you must have thought hard on this
? no wish

Comment on Winter Poem by Emma and Heather

Emma and Heather — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:09:41 +0000

*STAR* good adjectives
*STAR* good openers
?WISH? could you use more commas instead of just full stops.

Comment on Should children wear school uniform? by Megan by Bethany and Jennifer

Bethany and Jennifer — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:06:26 +0000

*Star* good sentences, i think you are right about wearing the uniform.
*Star* good punctuation.
!Wish! check you’re spelling.

Comment on HELP ALLIGATOR JUST ATE MY ARM! by Chloe and Logan

Chloe and Logan — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:05:47 +0000

star- you have good punctuation
star- you have good adjectives
wish- can you see the spelling mistake in the first line??

Comment on Should children wear school uniform? by lyndsay. by laura & kieran

laura & kieran — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:01:55 +0000

*- that was a very well thought up story
*- you have used very good vocabulary
?- you could have used less paragraphs

Comment on James and the Giant peach by Emma and Heather

Emma and Heather — Wed, 28 Nov 2007 12:01:19 +0000

*-you have good adjectives.
*-you have put in good vocabulary such as spectacles.
?-use more openers except just she.